PARKINSON, pansy helen

[pansy]

Goodbye

[Kat']

Hi Dee and welcome to Young Blood!

First of all, we think your application is pretty much fine. It is in the shorter side, especially in her history, and we always like to see more rather than less.

What we do notice, that makes us hesitate on accepting your this very moment, is that there are a number of spelling and grammatical errors. Most of the grammatical ones are minor & I'm just nitpicky.

Your spelling errors, however, are something that have to be dealt with. It's not that you spell words completely incorrectly, but the words you do spell are real ones that do not fit (if that makes sense). For example, in your example, you say 'sighting' instead of 'sighing' and 'wondering' instead of 'wandering'. You also mix up 'seating' and 'sitting'. A spell checker won't catch these errors!

Devvi and I both believe that if you take a pause, breathe, and read your application and example post out loud, you can catch your errors! There is no need to rush through an application or post, we'll always be here when you're done.

I also would like to see your age, simply because we do not want to break TOS and we would also like to verify that we're not accepting a child to roleplay with us :]

When you fix up your application, comment in the cbox or shoot Devvi or myself with a quick message and we will read it over again.

Thank you very much!

[pansy]

Done

[`Devvi]